How to Make a Capturing Introduction for a Book
Be mysterious., If you don't follow step one, be open., Introduce some kind of action to get the story going., Relax, but not too much.
Step-by-Step Guide
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Step 1: Be mysterious.
Here's an example: "The man stood over the high hills, looking over the dark ocean. 'The mission,' he thought to himself.
But he didn't move.
Ding...ding...ding.
His phone rang.
Answering it, he said, "What do you want?" "The package is late, Mordred." Then the line went dead." See? Introductions like that capture readers because...well...the mystery! Even if it's not a mystery story, that's a good introduction.
Why? Because, even with that kind of beginning, maybe Mordred is actually a mailman who's taking a break from his job.
His conscience is nagging at him to finish the mail route, but he doesn't.
Then a tenant calls him, saying his VERY important package is late.
Nothing mysterious about that! But with that kind of introduction, readers will keep reading! -
Step 2: If you don't follow step one
Maybe a mysterious introduction just didn't work for your kind of story.
You could go with this kind: "Adam walked happily up the high hills, looking over the nighttime ocean.
His hair, unusually long for a male, was long and golden.
He was clearly very strong and was a handsome boy.
Ring-ring-ring! His phone rang.
He answered it, saying,'Hi Aaron! I was just thinking--Mom said I could have a couple of my friends over when they could.
Wanna come Oh, you're grounded? Your mom just let you call me to tell me that? Ah, alright.
When will you be ungrounded? Alright, tomorrow it is.
See ya' then!' Then Aaron hung up the phone.' Same setting, same general structure, but different from the other one.
Why? Because you introduced your characters.
You described them.
Using words like "night time" as opposed to "dark" can change an introduction too. , For example: "Adam walked calmly home.
He opened the door, got on the floor, and everybody walked the dinosaur! Just kidding.
He opened the door and was shocked at what he saw.
His mother, with a butcher knife, was viciously stabbing a large chunk of deer meat. 'Mom!' Adam said. 'What in Toilet-Paper's name are you DOING?!' 'Uhh... stabbing this chunk of meat?' 'Why?' 'Dunno! Something just possessed me to do it.' 'Mom, you were never like that before.' 'Nope!' Then his mom walked out the back door like nothing had ever happened.
But still, he felt the presence of an entity.' There's some action, getting the story along.
Well, that's how I would continue an OPEN introduction.
The mysterious introduction comes next. "Mordred stepped down the hill angrily.
Down below, waiting for him, was a large, white truck.
He got inside reluctantly and began his mail route again.
He made sure the man who had called him got his important package.
He went around, double-checking that everyone had gotten their mail.
Everyone had except one couple.
Mordred shrugged, thinking they had gone on vacation.
Then he realized their car was still in the driveway, and that they had been there on his first time around.
His heart sank--something had happened to them--he just knew it!--and he had to find out what. , Let your story get a bit easier, but don't make it too boring.
Even though you have a good introduction, the rest of your story could stink.
A capturing introduction won't do much good if what comes after it is something no reader would read under any circumstances. -
Step 3: be open.
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Step 4: Introduce some kind of action to get the story going.
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Step 5: but not too much.
Detailed Guide
Here's an example: "The man stood over the high hills, looking over the dark ocean. 'The mission,' he thought to himself.
But he didn't move.
Ding...ding...ding.
His phone rang.
Answering it, he said, "What do you want?" "The package is late, Mordred." Then the line went dead." See? Introductions like that capture readers because...well...the mystery! Even if it's not a mystery story, that's a good introduction.
Why? Because, even with that kind of beginning, maybe Mordred is actually a mailman who's taking a break from his job.
His conscience is nagging at him to finish the mail route, but he doesn't.
Then a tenant calls him, saying his VERY important package is late.
Nothing mysterious about that! But with that kind of introduction, readers will keep reading!
Maybe a mysterious introduction just didn't work for your kind of story.
You could go with this kind: "Adam walked happily up the high hills, looking over the nighttime ocean.
His hair, unusually long for a male, was long and golden.
He was clearly very strong and was a handsome boy.
Ring-ring-ring! His phone rang.
He answered it, saying,'Hi Aaron! I was just thinking--Mom said I could have a couple of my friends over when they could.
Wanna come Oh, you're grounded? Your mom just let you call me to tell me that? Ah, alright.
When will you be ungrounded? Alright, tomorrow it is.
See ya' then!' Then Aaron hung up the phone.' Same setting, same general structure, but different from the other one.
Why? Because you introduced your characters.
You described them.
Using words like "night time" as opposed to "dark" can change an introduction too. , For example: "Adam walked calmly home.
He opened the door, got on the floor, and everybody walked the dinosaur! Just kidding.
He opened the door and was shocked at what he saw.
His mother, with a butcher knife, was viciously stabbing a large chunk of deer meat. 'Mom!' Adam said. 'What in Toilet-Paper's name are you DOING?!' 'Uhh... stabbing this chunk of meat?' 'Why?' 'Dunno! Something just possessed me to do it.' 'Mom, you were never like that before.' 'Nope!' Then his mom walked out the back door like nothing had ever happened.
But still, he felt the presence of an entity.' There's some action, getting the story along.
Well, that's how I would continue an OPEN introduction.
The mysterious introduction comes next. "Mordred stepped down the hill angrily.
Down below, waiting for him, was a large, white truck.
He got inside reluctantly and began his mail route again.
He made sure the man who had called him got his important package.
He went around, double-checking that everyone had gotten their mail.
Everyone had except one couple.
Mordred shrugged, thinking they had gone on vacation.
Then he realized their car was still in the driveway, and that they had been there on his first time around.
His heart sank--something had happened to them--he just knew it!--and he had to find out what. , Let your story get a bit easier, but don't make it too boring.
Even though you have a good introduction, the rest of your story could stink.
A capturing introduction won't do much good if what comes after it is something no reader would read under any circumstances.
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